Overall+comments

Overall:
 * mixed with text inclusion: sometimes too little, sometimes too much
 * need to follow PEA
 * too much paraphrasing rather than analysis
 * disregarding language and literary features? Engage more! Check rubric for Paper One: Commentary on WIKI
 * disconnection among paragraphs and from introduction
 * clearly state and develop subtopics: time well-spent
 * TS must cover all that is being presented in paragraph
 * Consider purpose
 * TS is sometimes just plot: make point and prove it
 * Use strong verbs: avoid is/are
 * Too many needless expressions: “it shows that”, “the fact being that”
 * Lengthy sentences meander, sometimes away from meaning